Correcting Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs

Remedying Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs This activity offers practice in distinguishing and adjusting unnecessary sentence pieces during the altering phase of the creative cycle. Guidelines The accompanying unmistakable passage contains three unnecessary sentence sections. Initially, recognize the three sections, and afterward right each oneeither by appending it to a neighboring sentence or by transforming the piece itself into a total sentence. When youre done, contrast your adjusted sentences and those in the altered form of the passage underneath Anthony (unedited draft) My five-year-old child Anthony is manufactured like a little wrap up toy. His dark wavy hair, thick eyebrows, a charming catch nose, and tubby cheeks, which individuals cannot avoid squeezing. These make him appear as though a real existence size teddy bear. Anthony wants to wear his preferred dark cowhide coat with the picture of Mumble the penguin on the back. Also, pants with patches on the knees because of the gaps he places in them while slithering on the floor, pushing his toy vehicles around. Without a doubt, he is an extremely vigorous young man. In one evening, he will ride his bike, play computer games, total a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, obviously, play with his toy vehicles. Actually, his vitality alarms me some of the time. For instance, that time on the rooftop. He shinnied up a tree and hopped onto the rooftop. Be that as it may, he wasnt vigorous (or strong) enough to move down, thus I needed to protect my superb little wrap up toy. Here is the altered variant of Anthony, the expressive passage that filled in as the model for the sentence-piece altering exercise. Remember that there are different methods of revising the three parts in the activity. Anthony (altered adaptation) My five-year-old child Anthony is manufactured like a little wind-up toy. He has dark wavy hair, thick eyebrows, a charming catch nose, and pudgy cheeks, which individuals cannot avoid pinching. These make him appear as though an actual existence size teddy bear. Anthony wants to wear his preferred dark calfskin coat with the picture of Mumble the penguin on the backâ and his preferred pants, the ones with patches on the knees. The patches spread the openings that occurred from creeping on the floor, pushing his toy vehicles around. Indeed, he is an extremely vivacious young man. In one evening, he will ride his bike, play computer games, total a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, obviously, play with his toy vehicles. Truth be told, his vitality alarms me sometimes. For model, I will always remember that time he shinnied up a tree and hopped onto the roof. However, he wasnt fiery (or strong) enough to move down, thus I needed to save my awesome little wrap up toy.